Well, Nano is water under the bridge for me at this point. I have a pretty good 25k worth of “bones” I’m keeping to flesh out the first half of Evermine. The rest doesn’t make the cut, but it gave me some much needed insight into these characters and their motivations.
When my feet hit solid ground, I ran.
My steps squelched over grass and leaves dampened by the earlier thunderstorm. Sapling trees slapped my face. My eyes watered from the speed, from the limbs I hadn’t brushed aside, then from the flurry of an insect cloud I stormed through.
I skittered to a halt as I picked up the scent. Death so fresh the bugs swarmed this section of quiet wood and hummed their greedy needs in my ears.
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Marsha A. Moore says
Wow! Tension is everywhere in that scene. I love your detailed description of the woods she traveled through.
Pippa Jay says
Great six sentences, and I loved the last line. Leaves me asking what next.
Taryn Kincaid says
Great description. Wonderful foreshadowing. Humming, swarming bug clouds. Oh, no!
Layna Pimentel says
Intriguing post and I love the word play here. 🙂
Great descriptions x
Jessica Subject says
I can picture this scene perfectly, including the bug cloud. Yuck!
Heather Thurmeier says
Wow. I really love this! Great job with nano, too. I finished with 54K, and now comes the revisions. Should be fun! Looking forward to more of this next week.
Marie Dees says
oh! Nice scene. And a good start from Nano is sometimes a great thing to keep you going through the holidays!
Dee Carney says
Oh em gee that's intense! Wow!
Christa Paige says
Your vivid detail makes me cringe, I'm so not a bug person. Wondering what is going to be found in the next moment is also making me grit my teeth, death looms….and it seems to be right up ahead.
The detail is perfect. I almost couldn't catch my breath when I was reading it. I can't wait to read more
Eve Cassidy says
Ewww and WOW. *g* The description in your snippet was awesome.
Eleri Stone says
Really vivid and intense description. Great flow to it too.
Lex Valentine says
This is awesome. Well done!
Alyn Rosselini says
I felt as if I were running. Great job. The word 'squelch' is now stuck in my mind.
Jaime Samms says
Amazing. I love this. Very action-packed for six sentences. If the whole book is like that, it'll be hard to put down.